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Correct a writing crime

#5 – VERBS – BEING CONCISE & PRECISE 2

RESTORE BY NUMBERS I provide a passage from a master that has been vandalized (by me) at the numbered locations.  You restore the original.  THE CRIME: The ends of their long sweeping boughs were hanging (1) down like searching fingers, … Continue reading

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#4 – VERBS – BEING CONCISE & PRECISE 1

RESTORE BY NUMBERS I provide a passage from a master that has been vandalized (by me) at the numbered locations.  You restore the original.  THE CRIME: The guns are no longer being fired (1) before Procter’s reinforcements can be brought … Continue reading

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#3 – VERBS – ANIMATED SUBJECTS

RESTORE BY NUMBERS I provide a passage from a master that has been vandalized (by me) at the numbered locations.  You restore the original.  THE CRIME: He took off (i) his shoes and went down (ii) the bank into the … Continue reading

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#2 – VERBS – STRONG ACTIVES

RESTORE BY NUMBERS I provide a passage from a master that has been vandalized (by me) at the numbered locations.  You restore the original.  THE CRIME: Brun turned on his heel (1) and walked with long steps (2) toward the … Continue reading

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#1 – VERBS – WEAK PASSIVES

RESTORE BY NUMBERS I provide a passage from a master that has been vandalized (by me) at the numbered locations.  You restore the original.  THE CRIME: In the morning Mrs Collard was buried (1) by them.  There was no burial … Continue reading

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#5 – DIALOGUE – PURPOSEFUL

RESTORE BY NUMBERS I provide a passage from a master that has been vandalized (by me) at the numbered locations.  You restore the original.  THE CRIME: Bill’s Café, on the A30 near Bagshot: “Tea, please, Bill.  Two sugars.” The constable … Continue reading

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#4 – DIALOGUE – EXCLAMATIONS

RESTORE BY NUMBERS I provide a passage from a master that has been vandalized (by me) at the numbered locations.  You restore the original.  THE CRIME: “You stupid bugger! (1)” Smith said to Johnson.  “You just dug your own grave! … Continue reading

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#3 – DIALOGUE – ACTION BEATS

RESTORE BY NUMBERS I provide a passage from a master that has been vandalized (by me) at the numbered locations.  You restore the original.  THE CRIME: “She’s here voluntarily?” “My God, yes,” he said unconvincingly (1).  “How else would she … Continue reading

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#2 – DIALOGUE – ADVERBIAL TAGS

RESTORE BY NUMBERS I provide a passage from a master that has been vandalized (by me) at the numbered locations.  You restore the original.  THE CRIME: “. . . What shall we call him?” “Would you like Ebony?” said she … Continue reading

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#1 – DIALOGUE – SIMPLE TAGS

RESTORE BY NUMBERS This will be a regular feature.  I’ll provide a passage from a master that has been vandalized (by me) at the numbered locations.  You restore the original.  THE CRIME: “Did you see the boy in here that … Continue reading

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